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    [vulnerability] 1.0
    Crack your skull and grope the red-grey insides. Feel around for the substance you hide so well.
    Probed.
    A thin slice down your protruding ribcage to find the warmth you hoard. Taste the emotions you pent up in your undersized heart with my teeth, lick the feeling off my lips.
    Exposed.
    I want to see you stripped. Stare at YOUR vulnerability. Emotionally naked, you're the most appealing you've ever been.
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    [vulnerability] 2.0
    Skin made malleable by near boiling temperatures, white fingerprints on a scalded stomach.
    Steam clouds clog memories, and the brain cuts the concept of time.
    Unable to move, unable to see, unable to feel.
    All that is seen is red-black.
    Chin meets chest, leaving imprints of blank thought.
    Circulation forced into commission, feel the numbness melt from frozen appendages.
    Substance drains.
    How I would love for you to take advantage of MY vulnerability.
    You want to see ME stripped? Emotionally naked, I am more devastating than you ever could have been.
    The shock of ice freezes me in reality, and I am no longer yours.
    You're too late.

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    Senior Hostboard Member Hannibal's Avatar
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    Wow, i felt like I was watching a horror flick, that was like... illegal. But like all things that way, i loved it. It was unique, with a blend of "spices" i guess you could say, that I personally, am sort of unfamiliar with. I really liked the imagery though, it left me wondering how you got so much, out of so little.
    Nice work, and glad you came to the board [img]wink.gif[/img]

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    I really liked this too. The imagery made me feel uncomfortable but that's because I'm naturally squeemish but it also reminded me of something personal-nothing gory lol just emotions. Besides I'm assuming that effect was deliberate.


    I was reading and thinking 'how can I 'borrow' some of this imagery without verging on plagierism. [img]wink.gif[/img] --- compliment. Sometimes I do 'borrow' an idea from someone else though.

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    Thanks. [img]smile.gif[/img]

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    Senior Hostboard Member Hannibal's Avatar
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    Nice one word reply goatcheese!

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    Mmmm...goatcheese.

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